Evi

Congrats, Amy. ^^

It's fantastic. And great timing, too! Thanks!

First of all, because of language and a little bit of the content, you need to rate this at least 16, maybe 18-- I forget the exact rule. My name ...

I need to find a new, creative way to say, "You're my hero."

Tomorrow I'll be attempting to fly into the snowy ice trap of doom that is the American East Coast, but granted I survive the flight, I'll be spending Christmas with ...

Try something written by John Green, Caroline B. Cooney, or Nancy Werlin.

Hey Sudz! Evi here. First of all, before I can continue-- you've seriously got to reread your stuff. Just in the prologue thingy, you have oodles of typos and punctuation ...

Hola, Smorg. ^_^ Maureen gives me a look. “It’s your turn” , she says. Comma goes inside the quotation marks. EDIT: Haha, scratch that, then. Silly American education, I suppose. ...

Linx and Clo have both, at some point, helped me with stories by showing me where I have awkward sentences, and how to fix details like that. On the other ...

Hey, Fantasyfreak. Evi here. ^_^ So, I do think this story has a ton of potential. The idea is interesting and the cast of characters you have to work with ...

Sometimes, you don't even necessarily need a full-fledged plot for a short stories-- just a theme. If you have a theme and interesting characters to work with, you can pull ...

Excellent advice, Tiff! Especially the part about waiting for a couple of days, until you can kind of seperate yourself from the writing a bit to analyze it better. I ...

Hey, Kylan. I was determined to review the oldest work on the 'unanswered literary items' list, and, of course, it's you. And it's really hard to review you without beginning ...

5/10 I like the idea, and the questions it stirs up, but the way it's phrased makes the characters' identities unclear. A first paragraph needs to be clear and not ...

Hey Bouncing! Welcome to YWS. So, this will be short and to the point! You have a good start, with a nice introduction to your main character, but you're getting ...