Evi

Secondary (mine)-- A girl discovers a parallel universe where the other half of her soul is slowly dying, and she must find a way to save her in order to ...

I really like the badges, Nate, although I think Prok has a point. It's not terribly important, since you can tell the badges apart by mousing over them, but if ...

Good stuff, Rosey. Thanks. ;) My NaNo-rewrite will require me to keep all of this in mind.

Hey Nike! I'm Evi, and I'm going to be completely honest in the hope that you take none of my constructive criticism the wrong way. This needs work. The biggest ...

Sorry for the delay! savouring the bitter taste of it. He truly hated the taste of olives, but so did his wife and it repulsed her when he ate some. ...

Do not be discouraged! My inability to follow the plotline could very well be my fault, and not yours. Essentially, I based this off actual events - there was a ...

Hey Jigs! Here, again, to comment on the rest, and on the story as a whole. Honestly, this is not my thing. It's written well; that can't be denied. But, ...

Hello Kit! I hurt. I hurt all over. Laaame. ;) This is the textbook definition of telling, and not showing. And the last thing you want to do is use ...

Novel Subforums would be amazing. And I like the readjustments.

Yo-la, Hannah, dear. It's wonderful to see you posting something again. ;) So, heavily-stylized prose like this has never been my reviewing strong point, because I'm always worried that (a) ...

Hello Aura! Welcome to YWS. Just as a reminder, the more reviews you do on other people's works, the more likely you are to be reviewed. ;) The smell of ...

Not yet, but Nate has a lot of work to do, and he's the only judge. So be patient. They'll be out eventually. ;)

The Book Thief by Marcus Zusak, for the hand-picked section, as well as The Hunger Games by Suzanne Collins. ;) Cool idea, Nate.

Hello Luna! I'm Evi. Welcome to YWS. So, this is a step in the right direction! You have a good basis for conflict (the confrontation) and an interesting scenario. However, ...

Sounds good to me.