Evi

Wow! So, you've already gotten some pretty in-depth critiques. Hopefully I can still be of help. ^_^ As I think you've heard before, too-fast pacing is becoming a problem for ...

Chapter Two: Morning light whisked through the crimson leaves, leaving angular shadows over what was left of a Catholic cemetery. It's great that you're so determined to use interesting words ...

Hello Puffycherry! Thanks for the request. Chapter One: I clasped the yellow form within my hands, the buses' engine revving ever so slightly as it turned down the country path. ...

No one loves me, huh? Any takers?

Hey Wheadee; I'm Evi. I smiled at the title. ;) Interesting premise you have here, huh? I read over the first part of chapter one just to get a feel ...

What does it mean when someone logs in and out the chat many times in a row? This is a chat glitch, and not the fault of the user in ...

Hello Dis. ;) I haven't read the first two chapters, so I'm going to mainly be commenting on flow and style as opposed to plot. He always promised that he ...

Hey Yoha! I love the simplicity and clear emotion here, and since Pengu has already given you sure a thorough critique, I'm just going to say a couple of things. ...

Hello Spike! Here as requested. just keep hope light the spark. You're missing either a piece of punctuation, an "and", or a "to" after the word hope. Not much to ...

Feel free to continue your Twilight discussion in this thread . ;) *locked*

Feel free to continue your discussion in this thread . ;) *locked*

Hello Jagged! Were you one of the people with whom I was discussing experimental prose and perspective-tense combinations in Chat? I think you were. I also think you posed the ...

Hey Jackle. ;) Now, I'm a little confused as to what this is supposed to be? A short story, the beginning of a novel/novella, or some sort of background introduction ...

Firstly, my apologies to Evi for not going with Caligrafeed Haha, I understand. The FEED is pretty awesome too! All these new additions are very exciting. Thanks Nate!

Hello Ellie! Here as requested. So, I really liked the idea behind this, this whimsical world and dreamy atmosphere. I, too, liked the pastel line the best, but I felt ...