Evi

Aloha! Before anything, there is a typo in your title, which is a really bad place to have a typo. It should be Too soon . There are quite a ...

Hey blackbird! Because I'm a day late to review this, Jack has swooped in and really taken the words right out of my mouth. I don't have much else to ...

Hey, Tanya! Sorry this is so late-- I was out of town until yesterday. You've already gotten some helpful advice, so this won't be too long. (Although every time I ...

I see my dot! And it's fairly large. Which either means that I spend way too much time here, or there are fellow YWSers lurking in my city.

Hey Irish! I was surprised that this went for so long with only a single review. Just as a warning, I'm going to give an extensive line-by-line crit and then ...

So, I'm back from vacation and open for business again! *poof!*

Hello Navita! Glad I saw this before I left. It seems obvious to you that you should have changed before you came. No, too much to start with. An interesting ...

Hello, I'm Evi. I moved this to General Fiction Novels since you said this is the beginning of a novel, and not a short story. Does that make this a ...

Hey again, Star. ;) It's great that you came into chat so soon after joining! The only anime I ever really watched was Sailor Moon, as evidenced by my avatar. ...

Hey RR! I'm a bit confused-- is this supposed to replace the other chapter I read, the one in a spoiler, or is this a continuation? In the twenty years ...

Awesome job, Skins. ;)

Very uncool. I'll be in Siena, Italy, and it'll be midnight, and I won't have my piano. This displeases me. I'll just have to listen to it afterwards, I suppose!

Hey Tigereyes! Love the avatar. I used to be a hard-core Winnie the Pooh fan. ;) So, this was an entertaining read! I like the conflict that the narrator's facing, ...

Hello! It's me again. Sorry if some of my advice on the last chapter was repetitive with the other reviewers; Tatra snuck in and posted a critique while I was ...

Hey Bwhit, hope you're enjoying YWS. You should do some reviews of your own! Give and you shall receive. ;) Esther and Tatra said much of what I'm thinking, so ...