Evi

Hey Kasan, Evi here! :) :arrow: Show, don't tell! I'm not going to do a line-by-line because, well, there's too much to point out, unfortunately. But that's okay! That's what ...

Hey Hobbit! I just realized that I spelled the title wrong in my PM. Sorry about that! Inside the Captain’s quarters there was a calm. It was his sanctuary. This ...

Alleluia! Good work here. Your imagery basically fizzles out after the second stanza, but you have something to work with, at least! This liquid-like moon is artificial enough to splash ...

Awesome job Jetpack! *confetti*

Hey Iceprincess! Firstly, the two syllable mistakes for the haiku format: The world spins around her and Girl turns her back Both are missing a syllable. Brushing off some dust ...

ARGH. I wrote an entire review for this and then accidentally clicked "paste", erasing the whole thing. I'll give you the same advice...just in a more condensed form. :arrow: If ...

Aloha Drawers! Now, I know this was for a school assignment and has personal meaning, but I'm going to critique it as fiction since you posted it here. Luckily there ...

Hey EliteHusky, Evi here! So, this was pretty lukewarm. Firstly, it's hardly ever a good idea to start a story with a character waking up, because it's been done so ...

Hey Hibiscus. ^_^ I'm Evi. First of all, I'd reverse the title to Letting Go of You, for You , but that's a personal preference. This is a bit of ...

Sargsauce, you're good. You are seriously a freaking good writer. This was even better than the story I critiqued earlier, I think. And the fact that this is so good, ...

Hello Galerius, very nice to meet you. I'm Evi and I run to this poem full-speed while brandishing a pitchfork. I ...noose. This bothered me more the more I thought ...

Hello Wolfpaws! Welcome to YWS. :) Hopefully soon you'll feel comfortable enough with the site to offer some constructive criticism on other people's writings, yes? So! Before anything else, as ...

To add to Rosey and Nate: if you see a successful storybooker, we have a badge for that! Nominate someone if you see that they're consistently helpful and skilled in ...

Nifty. I've always liked the points system. NOW YOU ALL SHALL PAY-- LITERALLY. But, yeah. Cool stuff.

Maybe, Lumi, but I see no harm in her posting here for a wider opinion. Sam, if you have any more specific questions, that usergroup could be a good place ...