EvensLily

What a brilliant chapter! I could find nothing wrong with it really, but it was so good! The only thing I would change is the little fight she had with ...

Hey, I enjoyed you're style of writing and I got drew in! Though you made a slight spelling mistake: he herd the anger in her voice... I think it should ...

Heya! It was you're title that really drew me in, I'm not sure why but the word I, is much more important then I had realized thank you for the ...

This poem was good, dealing with Loss is a hard subject so a lot of thought needs to go into what you are writing about... just like you did! You ...

This is an amazing poem, truly loved it! I loved the way it all seemed to come together. It's what every girl wants to hear! Love, EvensLily x

Chapter TWO: the FLASHBLACK LOCATION: The Park I opened my ripped backpack, for some reason no matter how much stuff I put in there it always seemed to be enough ...

That was good, I really enjoyed that! The poem was real, that's what I enjoyed about it, it seemed to flow perfectly. It was simplistic and not too harsh on ...

Wow, that was really touching, I really loved it!! I love it when they fight but come together in the end! I love that mopey stuff... Overall i thought though ...

I do find this very interesting, me and my sister yeah we get along but... I don't know she can sometimes be a right pain in the ass, I totally ...

Chapter ONE: HELL LOCATION: Glasgow’s Queen Victoria prep for the gifted and talented. My hell, school. School was not somewhere I wanted to go; like the park. It was somewhere ...

Heya! I really enjoyed you're first poem, the way it rhymed and flowed together, I could tell what you meant and how much soul you put into it... the second ...

I enjoyed this story but got slightly confusing at the end, to make it longer you might want to define what you mean by the line about "He's Just In ...

This is a brilliant Poem, with such depth! Really Loved it, truly Inspirational, I'd love to see more of you're work! Love, EvensLily x

Really loved this! everything from the way you have written it, to the story you are telling, seriously brilliant. Great writing style, great rythem, flows of the Tongue easily. Really ...

I really, really liked this! so much feeling, tension, I believe that if could elaborate just a tad bit more then it would be even greater then it already is. ...