EvensLily

I really like the title of this piece of poetry, very good! Some things I felt you described too much, the usage of long words didn't seem to fit well, ...

Chapter FOUR: The SLAP LOCATION: Big mama Flora’s house + Home The sunlight hit my face nicely warming me. I smiled. Must have had a good night sleep last night ...

I get what you all mean! No harshness intended, this isn't my best work. Thanks for you're comments you helped! X

Hey! This story was very good, had a lot of feeling to it, though I think you could have made the difference of time just that slightly clearer I sometimes ...

Hey! When I read the title I was excited, I love a good soppy short love story and then i suddenly found myself crying... Oh god! This story was so ...

Heya, This was really good... If that's the right word! I loved the title it drew me in. You need to work on you're grammar and punctuation before you post ...

Really good!! When I saw the warning, I was slightly nervous but I made myself read on and so glad I did, perfect! cannot wait to read more :) Love, ...

Hey, I enjoyed your writing, though it was slightly blocky in places. Like the person said before me maybe you should re-read things before you post them focusing entirely on ...

Heya! I thought this story was really quite good, I enjoyed it a lot and I want to read more! Grammar and punctuation was okay, didn't really see any problems ...

Deffo not my best piece of work, I think it could be good, i just need some opinions! Thanks x The wall stood high above the ground, showing no signs ...

Heya This is a great piece of writing, a great title choice too. The 9/11 attacks saved my life... not you're normal title, Its great! Like someone said before me, ...

Hey, This was great, so great! No, really! anamnesis, such a cool word, it's become my word of the month and then you hit me with Sisyphus... I have no ...

This is a long one, they all won't be as long as this :) Enjoy x Chapter THREE: HEARTLESS LOCATION: the Bridge Ah, the boys. As I strapped my cold ...

Hey, This piece of writing was good and well presented on the page. Good strong characters that seemed to go well with each other, the only problem was it was ...

A great piece of writing here, really is. I was immediately sucked into the events, really interesting, can't wait to read more! Love, Evenslily x