EternalSleep

Thank you guys. And Pri, I believe sorrowed is a word, but thanks.

Welcome to the place to see A shadow of what used to be A place where broken hearts collide And drown themselves in cyanide. Welcome to this wretched place Where ...

Okay, so overall, this is an alright piece. If it's meant to be a song, I can understand how it might be a lot different or more striking with music, ...

Thanks everyone. I really don't like it though. Any advice on what could make it better?

“Why the hell am I here?” She cries all alone. Staring in the mirror, The sunken eyes aren’t her own. Living on lettuce, Perfection’s the goal. Throwing up blood, Her ...

Alright, so. What you have here is good. I feel it could be very much expanded upon. You mention missing things, but when you address something like that, it should ...

I'm sorry, it's rather lengthy. --- I live in this world, Of confusion and doubt, Where labels mean everything, And I am labeled out. I’m breathing, I’m breathing, Though I’m ...

I wrote this song for my friend at her request in exchange for a painting of a unicorn. Hannah's song  I'm trying... To get a hold of myself, Yeah, I'm ...

Beautifully written. I'm surprised you don't do this poetry thing more often. You've got some incredible skill. I don't know if you are writing from experience or imagination, but, having ...

As is, this poem is incredibly short. It's an intriguing topic, and although very deep, these few stanzas are very shallow. It needs emotion, passion, imagery, detail. Quite honestly, right ...

This seems like it would be song lyrics more so than just a poem. I'm not sure why I just got that feeling. The words never seem to fit into ...

I disagree with LastPaladin but writing isn't meant to be viewed the same by everyone after all. I really could relate to this poem, but only on a logical level. ...