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Okay, [major-like] edits made: -> Points from Twit’s, Stevie’s and Alleycat’s crits taken, at least most of them. Particularly the seriously cliché black-clad protagonist (or antagonist, I real

Firstly and standart-ly, as always I would like to thank my critters. J I know that this story was written quite a while ago, and that I already have a ...

Fan, Promised I’d give you some impressions, and here I am. Sorry for the wait. ^_^ Anyway, as I scanned through the story, I noticed that improvements were made. Notices, ...

7/10 Cute

Squallz, Again, I’ll to start out by thanking you for the review. Next, I would like to say that after reading it I couldn’t quite think of a coherent reply ...

Kyte, I vaguely remember you telling me about ‘Phoenix’; here I am, investigating. What you posted is very extremely terrifyingly short, and it really is hard to crit it, but ...

Emily, Welcome to YWS, first of all. I suppose hundreds of people have already said that, but really, who cares? Lol. As always with my crits, line-by-line one will come ...

9/10 Very, very nice. As in, why didn't I think of it?

Hello, I guess this is becoming a tad bit tedious and repetetive, but welcome to YWS. This is a great and terrifyingly addicted site - seriously. I go around as ...

Alainna, Thanks (and that goes again to everyone who read/critted and read/without critting) for the feedback. It's rather thrilling to find someone who actually is for the Voice as it ...

... The second stanza? But the bathroom part is important! *Whimpers* Also, I am starting to think that I am a bit over-enthusiastic with the exclamation marks. Anyway, again thanks ...

The use I am with poetry… I liked it. Now, I suppose, to not make this crit a waste of a post, I have to say why I liked it? ...

Sean Pendr, I will start my non-crit part by telling you off, *^_^* Writer’s note being writer’s not, it still ought to be correct from spelling-wise, grammar-wise, punctuation-wise and all ...

Aiva, I admit that I have not read what comes before. But since this is Chapter 1, all is well, yes? Yes? *Is still ashamed of self* Okay, here is ...

One more thing: Interesting titles catch a reader's eye, and vague 'chapter one' cut about half of the number of people that could have read the story. :) So, give ...