Esmé

Hey! That first sentence, made me think of a staircase with really highsteps (was heaving and red-cheeked by the end): so many adjectives! Reader doesn't focus on the flow, story, ...

Ha guess I might have gone a bit overboard with Fred. Was thinking along the age lines, and originally he was that, but then that bald spot came up and ...

Woaah. You two are amazing. Amazing! Kitty and Suzanne, thank you so much - now I feel that whatever I say, I'll be under-thanking, so I'm going to be quiet ...

Hello! Would you review of a piece of mine under historical fiction? Here's the link:

Yeah yeah yeah, Frederick's sketchy and bland >< I really need to something with that, I do. Thanks for reading :)

Thank you so much! I'll definitely smooth things out in the beginning, emphesize the party and cut the repetitions (ha, everytime I opened the document, I added one, or so ...

Hello! Would you critique Under historical finction, part one of two of a short story. Thanks in advance :)

Editing!

Editing!

Hey. Foudn the 'how do you know about the code?!|' repetition a bit eh. And I've kinda taken a liking to that last little word. So expressive! :p But Jean's ...

Hey! The beginning's a mishmash. Dance, circle, tread toes, always speaking of one but in the end not. It's choppy, consider rephrasing. The sky's blue, it's azure, it's a bit ...

Congratulations! :) :)

Hey! Short and sweet, a baby, mysterious person and Demon Hunters (and yea, title is what got me :)). Sincerely hope you'll move onward with this! Before actually getting to ...

Hello! First off are the uncapitalized "I's and words after periods, but those are little things that can be fixed during a re-read. Dialogue punctuation. Those big blobs of paragraphs, ...

Hello, First off, first three - lines. Voice descriptions. One's cool, two's okay veering toward a grimace, three (in a row), eek. In word's to use, your limitless; can do ...