Esmé

JFW1415 - last part? Aw. Quote: My mother has to go to another room she’s crying so hard, but people pretend not to notice. First part awkward, consider rephrasing? Quote: ...

JFW1415 - I had a nice, long critique typed up, but the wham. And as there are no batteries in my laptop… Yes. Well. I’ll try to repeat what I ...

Layelun, It’s horrible, no? To have dozen of ideas floating around your mind, and somehow not be able to put them on paper? Been there a million times… *self-pity. But, ...

Dream-Writer, Hello, and (a little late) welcome to the site. However, there is one thing that I really must say before continuing with your critique - at YWS, to post ...

Amal - thanks for reading, and the comment :) fallenangel - thanks, thanks, thanks :)

Wszystkiego najlepszego z okazji urodzin! (er, Happy Birthday...) :)

OnCeUpOnAtIm3Xo, Thanks for reading, and the review, too. Though I think a reason was added (mentioned?) at some point. Again, thanks. Cheers!

Eliza, Hello, welcome to YWS, and thanks for posting your work. However, we do have a ratio, and that would be 2:1. For every piece of your own that you ...

9/10 Really? Now, that did catch my attention.

KJ, To tell the truth, I think that this is my favorite chapter. I mean, I do like all of them - your writing is just awesome - but this ...

9/10 Me loves Tom.

JFW1415 - I like my intros, and though rarely do I have anything to say in them, I still continue with the tradition. This shall be no exemption, heh, even ...

spaced_out, Fanfiction, aye? Well, that “Review for Food” section certainly broadens my horizon as a critiquer ^^. I’ve never read or watched this, but I’ll try to do my best. ...

Holly, Thanks, thanks, thanks again : ) I am so very in your debt. I made the necessary corrections, and will probably be cutting out the teddy bear part. That ...

What? Seven? What?! I... I... I don't like this. *tiny, tiny voice. I want to read chapter seven, too... Now. And I echo KJ's last sentence.