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As I was browsing the forums, I stumbled upon your story, lol. I real side that I have not read the chapters that you posted before (I quite knew) so ...

I agree with the above :)

I would leave off the quote: like carrion drawn to a carcass I think your tryuing to make your story sound all impressive, (an dto a point that is good) ...

Tamora Pierce is great - she's a YA writer and wrote loads of fantastic books. Terry Prachett is okay, too. Whiever wrote "The Blue Sword" deserves to be here, to. ...

The function is working for me. -At least we know it works for SOMEONE. I don't know why it doesn't for you guys...

1st of Airflamed 23rd year of the Phoenix Diaries recovered from Naesaen Fires I was born as princess Einellith, youngest daughter of Oethon and Sanilorrah. I also had an older ...

i vote for Galatae's squid.

Granted. You meet a guy named Tom Cruise... -I mean, lots of people have the surname 'Cruise'... Just add the name... I wish I had a pet parrot which does ...

Oh, and an update: I noticed that at some parts you use language in the kind of 'it troubled him greatly'. That okay, I am totally for that, but if ...

quote Little light was left for them to depend on now. I have a feeling that there is something wrong with this sentence, but I’m not entirely sure… quote In ...

No particular order: The return of the king The blue sword Artemis Fowl books Ella enchanted Two towers Prisoner of azkaban Anything written by T. Pierce Klejnot i wachlarz (no ...

Okay, so here is my critique: Quote Why this school still decided to keep her around was a mystery to Arella. She had a bad habit of skipping gym and ...

I have that all the time... Its horrible... I have loads of ideas and scenes, but they're all in a jumble and in like 30 different notebooks. When I actually ...

Uhm, I was browsing the forums, and I stumbled upon your story again, lol. What I realised (after a bit of skimming) is that even though the picture is the ...

I also meant spaces after commas and full stops :) Its more decipherable that way. Aslo, apostrophes would be nice. Without them, it seem like you wrote the stroy just ...