Esmé

18th Watershone, 38th year of the Phoenix Time present As soon as she appeared from the Forest into the Smaller Audience Chamber, where only her maids under the command of ...

Quote: The elf and the dwarf stared each other in eye. ‘Eye in eye’? I’m not sure here, though, I was never good at such expressions… Quote: “I have to ...

Quote: Roku had kept his pace for three days with no food or rest and Tairen was at the verge of collapsing. Don’t you think ‘while’ would be better than ...

Uhm... I have no idea how to help you out here (to move this, i mean). -Maybe you should catch a moderator? Anyways, as to writing in fiction: You have ...

Quote: while he’s screaming at the audience I scan at first 10 rows looking for a certain red haired girl….but I cant find her. ‘While’ should be capital. ‘I scan ...

If it's not poetry then why is it in the poetry section? Fiction woukd be better, I think...

HA!

:) And, Phorcys, I just don't like meat. Eeew. My uncle for example can;t eat fish. He can't LOOK at fish. There was this murky story that my dad told ...

... -Ha, I got bored with this one.

Okay, the thing is that through Lillith's diaries I want to show the reader how she became queen. That will be equivelant to the non-diary part of my story, where ...

Hey, I write at lessons too, lol. I like chemistry, but physics... uhm, I fell asleep once.... Anyways, as to your poits question: You get points for posting messages (e.g. ...

27 - yes. I love those kind of prologues. Muahahaha. 29 - Decalogue of course. Why not? (Well, I probably won't finish the first book, but it never hurts to ...

(I did read the whole story :) Anyways, do I have to wait until someone else posts before I can post again?)

Thank you for the critique, Sureal!

Agree with Phorcys here. Today we had poetry on english (Elegia o... (chlopcu polskim)) and our teacher caught the occasion and started a long monologue about how poetry is going ...