Esmé

I have a quetsion: Why do I have to keep re-logging? I pressed the log me in automatically button, but it doesn't do anything. I didn;t use to have this ...

Oh, ok, its an exerpt. Sorry.

Firstly, it would be nice if you formated (spaces between paragraphs AND dialogues) Hey Wesley. You’re knew, aren’t you? Quote: Its small glow was like an ocean that tossed shadows, ...

If they ever make a film out of this, tell 'em to give "Loosing my religion" to Dayla's dying scene. Please, lol.

Quote: Reflexively, Dayla’s hand went to her cheek, to trace the four now somewhat faded scars, remnant of her last encounter with the reptilian powerhouse. ‘A remnant’? Also, I’m not ...

Back to Natalia's confession, lol. As I said it was interesting, but a bit abrupt. I mean, from what I know, you have 2 books about her children, don't you? ...

Mwahaha, writergirl and I are becoming your personal critics, hehe... Quote: No observer could have discerned that Dayla Batara did not belong, for with her speed and agility the skilled ...

Quote: He had never heard of mines off the shore of River Taquival, and had read extensively on Afanadar’s geographical history. -Maybe ‘even though’ would be better than ‘and’ here. ...

Quote: Garius Rabba motioned with one hand for the soldiers following him to stop, as he surveyed the rainforest-elven village before him. A minor village on the outskirt of Aldaria, ...

Oh, and to the gnomes: Maybe you should expand that dialogue a bit? Put emphasize on the fact that they're 'very hyper and exciteable, and tend not always to make ...

So you're a published writer? Congrats! Mwahaha, i'll get to read the book BEFORE publishing. -And for that I LOVE this site. :) Quote: Hands wringing each other nervously, Hands ...

Quote: In the dell below, they saw a good three dozen tuatara, worth with their combined strength and talons perhaps one hundred and half again in ordinary human soldiers. This ...

Yeah, Claudette and The Jesseble covered everything, lol. Quote” Medea stood staring fixedly ahead, the deed was underway, finally. Now as the sun was setting she stood down a back ...

Hm, as Writergirl said, it was good but not my style, lol. I couldn't catch any mistakes, and that a big plus for you. However, at some times I had ...

Um, but the quest for something is going to be so boooring :( Oh, I don't know. Guess I can't talk if I don't have and idea. Anyways, I just ...