Esmé

Perfect, thanks a million!

Hi, a few years back there was a terrific blog on - LiveJournal, maybe and probably. It had posts with advice and all sorts of things about writing, and was ...

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I know it's an excuse :D But I shouldn't know! I mean, it shouldn't be so obvious that it is, just my opinion. It might not seem like an important ...

Hello!! Welcome to YWS!! I adored the ‘rain pelted down’. What lovely phrasing! So, I adored that and then I’d kill the rest of the paragraph. Yep, I know it’s ...

Hello! The first paragraph was okay. I sort of feel that it could be better. It has the feel of wanting to angle for a dynamic, grabbing intro, and it ...

I am writing a novel. I hate my novel. I hate it. I mean, I like it it, but I hate it. I've been writing it for the last, oh, ...

Hey, Alright, so I think the story loses somewhat on generalizations: „like a human torso”, “faster than what most people could see”. No 1 is kinda okay, I guess, but ...

Hello, welcome to YWS, will be seeing you around a lot? =)

Hey, So I think that secondo part of the first paragraph can be cut off. That’s because the words themselves are ones which would suggest that the reader ends up ...

Hey, If one opens a door it opens. Not that riveting! So, I’d change the beginning sentence because blah blah blah it’s the beginning sentence, it’s supposed to be blah ...

It's a pretty name! (seriously. nothing else =P)

Happy Birthday!! :D

Hey! So, mural scene much better  And the answer to the mural (people paint…). More authentic/realistic, which was the point. But! Dialogue punctuation. If someone does something that isn’t ...

Click on 'My YWS' under YWS banner with adverts - click edit profile settings - on the left it says edit profile, and below - edit signatue. There you have ...