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Re: Wilf
The formatting and the grammar need some work. The sentences seem a bit clunky, and it is a bit hard to read as it currently is. However, I do enjoy ...
Jan 1, 2007 -
Re: Bridget (UNFINISHED - all critique welcome)
Overall, excellent story and beautiful imagery. However, in some parts, you seem to change tenses. I don't know if this was on purpose or not, but it breaks the flow. ...
Jan 1, 2007