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Re: The Sword of Selliadora, Chapter One: Tragedy's Touch
Thanks for the input (on both this and the prologue). I'll work on the suggestions for fine-tuning as I have time. Both this and the prologue are still in early ...
Jan 31, 2011 -
Re: The Sword of Selliadora, Prologue: The City of Aeir
Thanks for the input. I did enjoy writing the prologue because it is essentially the backdrop to the story. I've been re-reading it to see if I could move stuff ...
Jan 28, 2011 -
Re: The Sword of Selliadora, Chapter One: Tragedy's Touch
*Edit* Some parts of the old prologue have been moved here, and I've added paragraph breaks to make it "more readable," although I'm really not too happy that it had ...
Jan 28, 2011 -
Re: The Sword of Selliadora, Prologue: The City of Aeir
*Edit* I've adjusted this as much as possible without elimininating what is in my opinion vital information. Some chunks have been moved and will be seen in the first chapter, ...
Jan 28, 2011 -
Re: No Other Man
I really like the way this poem is written. You can really tell that the emotion is there. I'm not usually one for long lines in poems, but in my ...
Jan 28, 2011 -
Re: Frigid Night
I really like this poem, and I just have a few wee things to say! Firstly; It’s cold outside , a frigid night. I can be a bit of a ...
Dec 24, 2010 -
Re: Screaming Silent Prayers
When I read through this, the lyrics of Evanescence's songs, "Am I too lost to be saved?" "Return to me salvation" jumped out right away, because "Tourniquet" is a fairly ...
Dec 23, 2010 -
Re: The Sun.
Sun, Sun, Oh golden Sun! You watch us all day, And hear what we say. Nothing to say about this line, I like it. Sun, Sun, Oh golden Sun! We ...
Dec 22, 2010 -
Re: Frigid Night
*Edit* I updated this to take out the short repeated stanza, and incorperated some of it into a new full stanza. Here is a poem I wrote several years ago, ...
Dec 22, 2010 -
Re: Hello everyone.
Well, I never claimed that all 25 of the pieces I've written are good. In fact, some of the ones I've written I re-read and absolutely detest the way they ...
Dec 22, 2010 -
Re: Prayer
I really enjoyed reading this, and loved the content of the poem. There are only two things that just seem to jump out as stange: To your True Love’s kiss. ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: A Beautiful Illusion
This is a piece I wrote near the beginning of the year. When I write my poetry, most of it has a couple things in common: 1. A stanza that ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: The Snow.
When I read this through the first time, I did't have any initial interpretations, but after reading it a second time, I got the impression of a graveyard. I don't ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: Hello everyone.
I'm new to this site and just thought I'd give an introduction. I came accross YWS as a result of a google search, and thought it would be nice to ...
Dec 21, 2010
