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Re: The Doves
There is so many spelling and grammar mistakes. Your setences are dying! :thud: Please correct (and save) them! We also need to feel what's the character is feeling. She seems ...
Nov 14, 2009 -
Re: the mark part two
It's really short, and it has some errors. You should add some more detail and correct some sentences, and it will be even better. Her father often said "go change ...
Nov 6, 2009 -
Re: Luminescence: Part Eight (Read Below) - A Twilight Fanfic
I don't usually like to read Twilight, but I was bored so . . . yeah. Well, you're a better writer than Stephenie Meyer, and I actually enjoyed your writing. ...
Nov 6, 2009 -
Re: Flames
The story was very good, although it was a little bit dark. I saw a few spelling errors, and a lot of "dead" sentences. You should go over your sentences ...
Nov 4, 2009