Envy-the-Sinners

Hey Jiggity, You're welcome! What you said makes sense. :) It reads more like a (short) story than a novel, I think. Now you can just ignore my comments on ...

I was going to say that Part Two needs some editing, but you’ve said that yourself already. :) I don’t know if you’re still looking for reviews seeing as you ...

I’ve reviewed this story, because it looks promising, and it’s well-written. I have a tendency to nitpick... :P But you don’t have to agree with everything, of course! I loved ...

Thanks for the reviews! They're really helpful. :) I'll keep all of your suggestions in mind as I rewrite and finish this piece. I pronounce Cerys as Keh-ris . It's ...

Thank you so much for the reviews! I understand what you mean about hooking the reader. I see now that I wasn't really telling the reader anything about Cerys or ...

This is only the first part of the prologue to my new story, but before I write on I want to see if this is a catchy beginning or not. ...

Hey airbear320, I really enjoyed reading this. I was hooked from the very first sentence. You immediately pull the reader into your story. Your writing is to the point and ...

This is very well written. I loved it! I like the way you write; your story has a nice flow and the descriptions are good. You give the reader enough ...

I agree with what has been said before. The beginning of the story doesn’t hook the reader. The first sentence is too long and too descriptive. The paragraphs that follow ...

I agree with Cheshire-Writer , the story doesn’t seem to follow a constant flow. You also don’t use a lot of descriptions; you’re telling the readers what is happening, but ...

Hi Kamas and Kat!! Thanks for the welcome! And all the explanations! :) Kat: it’s cool to hear you like my name! :D It’s actually a very common name here ...

Hey everyone! I'm Marieke and I'm a 20-year-old Communication student from the Netherlands. I've been looking for a community such as this one for a while now. I would really ...