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Re: I'm new here.
Hello, my name is Envied. Not is it actually Envied, but that is what I would enjoy being called on here. I see this is a place for writing. I ...
Nov 28, 2011 -
Re: "Envied" - Preface
- Preface - I grew dizzy. I grew horribly, horribly light-headed. Dazed… Faint… Unsteady… It felt as if the world were tipping sharply as I lay on the white-sheet bed. ...
Nov 28, 2011 -
Re: Not an ordinary life 1
Great start, but maybe rephrase "gonna" to "going to". That is more proper. You do tend to use "little" too often - try rephrasing it to something like "young" or ...
Nov 28, 2011