Enigmatic_Penguin

Hello Penguin! :D This is going to be a shortish critique because I'm tired. :P The thing that I noticed about this work was the slow pace. It took several ...

In my opinion, the website is too bulky. It takes usually 4-5 seconds to load a page, and while it sounds like I am nitpicking, it does influence my browsing ...

This is the first story I have posted here! I thank everyone who takes time out for me to view and hopefully critique this... and I hope you like it! ...

Well Nate... if you raise the taxes of the rich and lower that of the poor, you are approaching a state of equilibrium, and no matter how distant that state ...

Well Nate... if you raise the taxes of the rich and lower that of the poor, you are approaching a state of equilibrium, and no matter how distant that state ...

Thanks Elel, I believe you do have a point with the race making. Mmm... all kind of challenging =P Maybe I'll use Dwarves and Elves, but like you said, look ...

I apologize about my post Nate, it wasn't exactly well though out. What I was trying to convey is that people who make less shouldn't have high tax rates, since ...

Dwarves living in mountains and being good miners. I mean, it seems fitting with their general appearance. If that is alright, what are something things I shouldn't do with my ...

Strange is always good. My character's animal partner is a squirrel that can shape-shift into a race I half made up (He shifts into a Salamander, or fire Elemental. They ...

Spot on Penguin. I would also say that another important consideration is devloping a clean energy economy. I was referring to that with the "energy situation". Another thing I would ...

I have to agree with Lena, Dan seems really nervous for his supposed age of 17; perhaps you could lower the age of Dan a bit? I feel that 17 ...

I am planning a fantasy story, and I would like to know if some of the following items would be consider... "deadly" cliches, if you will. Dwarves living in mountains ...

I believe the roots of the problems in America are caused by our two party government. The problem with it is you will only get two answers to a problem, ...

But I ask, HOW does a person know what created the Universe? We know how it was created, but saying that a God started the process is a bit ignorant, ...

Thanks everybody. I think mapping it out would help.