Enigmatic_Penguin

Thanks to the both of you! I'll try and get in a revised version up sometime this week. As usual, I have basketball, and plus it is the week before ...

Alright, I finally managed to get this edited. I think I did so well, but I'd like to know how I could make this longer. It seems... short to me.

Alright, thanks to the both of you! Looks like this chapter is in the final stretch of the editing race. :P

Alright, my second revisions has been posted and is more akin to the first draft. 8)

lol, looks I can only do one or the other well at the same time >.< I'll await your reread and see what the others say before I do something ...

Alright, I edited it! I hoep it works out well =P

Thanks to the both of you! I think I'll be able to edit this soon, if not by the end of the week. Kinda busy with... life. :P

Hi there. This is the edit of my first chapter. I really would like to see if I followed the criticisms given to me well. Smoke rose above the horizon; ...

I dunno if this allowed, but I am bumping up the thread, just to get some more views.

Please don't apologize for being harsh; I really enjoy the criticism. I'll put your time to good use, I assure you! I'll notify you when I post the edited version. ...

Hi there, once again. This is the second chapter in my story Enigmus, a tale of a boy and a mysterious penguin (Sounds dumb, doesn't it :P ) I enjoy ...

If the assignment was to do a short summary/review, that's fine... Alright, thanks. Yeah, it was supposed to be short. Normally I'd write something much bigger...

In my literature class,I chose to write about 1984. The writing portion is only part of the report, so that is why it was only supposed to be 1 page ...

I believe the roots of the problems in America are caused by our two party government. The problem with it is you will only get two answers to a problem, ...

Okay everyone, I revised the chapter. I made it longer, put in more action that I hope reveals Bayard's personality to all of you, and put less monotonous details. Enjoy!