Enigma

Lol I saw you had no comments on this, so I thought I might as well be the first. ----- Red = Word choice. Blue = Punctuation mistake. Green = ...

Heya, Ink. :D This was good, but I wasn't too fond of your first stanza: The chains of paper spoke, Voice hollow and without lively echo “What am I?” it ...

Two lines; they tell so much. :wink: At first, I didn't get it, I guess because I was looking too hard and trying to dig too deep for some hidden ...

Going with what everyone was saying before, your chapter needs just a little work. :wink: I don't know much about your characters, other than Daniel and Antonio are gay. :lol: ...

Hey, there. I've read all the other chapters to your story, and I must say that you've really got something here. :D Your characters are original, as is the plot, ...