Enchanted

I really liked the two alternating points of view, each so different. I liked knowing what was going on in both characters heads! tats a really clever way to write. ...

I really enjoyed this! mainly because I could really relate to it. the feelings your character expressed are very similar to those of mine and and someone in my life! ...

His hand brushed against mine. Electrifying. A bolt of lust rushed through my viens, and I found myself staring into his deep brown eyes. This was pathetic. Me. Him. It ...

I've highlighted my personal opinions and corrections in blue :) This is basically the beginning of something that I hope will turn out quite lovely. Sorry about the awkward ending. ...