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Re: Olivia and Stephen: Chapters 1 and 2
Prologue: Olivia How many moments in your life can you say, "This is where it all changed" for me, it's three. The moment I met him, the moment I fell ...
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: Snow Adrift
I really like when people refer to snow, theres something so inspiring about it! and I love how you take something so simple and make it so complex and beautiful. ...
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: Time
I think the concept it great, you could go ever deeper if you wanted I think! you have a great way of providing imagery. it's really amazing.
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: Crumbled (Into Place)
I really liked the two alternating points of view, each so different. I liked knowing what was going on in both characters heads! tats a really clever way to write. ...
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: Missing You
the quote was beyonddddd powerful to me! I loved how you chose to write on it. I thought it was a really greta piece of writing :)
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: New Year's Revelations
I really enjoyed this! mainly because I could really relate to it. the feelings your character expressed are very similar to those of mine and and someone in my life! ...
Jan 8, 2011 -
Re: A warm arrival never left so cold.
Thank you so much! your suggestions have helped me when going over it :) I appreciate it. to clear up confusion, in the beginning she is obviously being broken up ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: A warm arrival never left so cold.
any input is very appreciated !! :) It was the most wonderfully heartbreaking thing. He held my hand. I took it gracefully, politely, but most of all, insincerely. I was ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: You decide (:
His hand brushed against mine. Electrifying. A bolt of lust rushed through my viens, and I found myself staring into his deep brown eyes. This was pathetic. Me. Him. It ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: Alabaster Smile
I've highlighted my personal opinions and corrections in blue :) This is basically the beginning of something that I hope will turn out quite lovely. Sorry about the awkward ending. ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: I Hate Him.
I LOVE this. It's so relatable ! the concept is great. but in end, I'm still left with so many questions! I would love if the piece was longer, and ...
Dec 21, 2010 -
Re: between the lines.
These are the first two chapters of the story I am writing :) it is told from alternating views, Stephen and Olivia. I would REALLLLLLLYYY honestly appreciate ANY input even ...
Dec 18, 2010
