Empress

Hi again :) Once more you've given me excellent feedback! And no I love your reviews, they're really honest, and useful. If I can't get an agent then I'm going ...

Wow thanks for reading and reviewing, especially for the compliments :) I see your point about the similes though, I'll bear that in mind :) The final ellipses isn't actually ...

Hi there, thanks for reading and reviewing! And wow, what great points! The description of dawn was from the point of view of the prison complex from that one part ...

Wow, such a thorough review! Thank you for giving your thoughts. And what fantastic points! I realised the intro might seem a bit clunky, with a disproportional focus on imagery, ...

Thanks for reading and reviewing, and also for the compliments! Good point, I'll focus more on punctuation :) Much appreciated! Bethan :)

Haha never heard him referred to as Will Shakes! Thanks for all the compliments, and yep, great points :)

Thanks so much for such a thoughtful review. Very useful points, and I'm humbled by all those compliments :)

Thanks so much for reading and reviewing! Yeah it's an odd image, intended to lend an almost surreal edge to the main character's slightly crazed posturing. And no the lack ...

Thanks for reading and reviewing! That wee spelling mistake only happened when I copied and pasted it from my main draft, don't know why that happened, and the quote was ...

Yeah I'm inclined to agree :) Such nice words, thanks :) I love how everyone puts 'keep writing' at the end of reviews! :P

Wow thanks :) The significance of the ending was that the guy was unemployed basically and this soul-destroying realisation was slightly driving him insane. He's trying to run from the ...