EmmaGrayce

Thanks for the reviews, well yes it is about someone who is depressed but that is due to him having gone to war. "In the fields we all put down ...

Like candy floss in my mouth, My youth waters with delight To the sound of yellow trucks Overwhelming sand pits with construction. Then like a dog I lunge for the ...

yes it is about child slavery, more precisely the kids who weave carpets and such

Needs major feedback!! Help please? I need suggestions, but here it is: Lay with me under this October sky Let’s listen to the trees lullaby, Every leaf falls tenderly, a ...

Covered faces: can't tell who is who. This is a good starting line Impossible expressions you can not read. Nice idea but needs to flow a bit more, i would ...

Hey this was a really good piece, i liked the flow of it and the vocabulary you used! The only part that I didn't like was "Specters amid the river’s ...

Hi there! "You lied to my face looked deep in my eyes told me you loved me filled me with lies. You smothered my light (comma?) Dosed me in gas ...

Hey everyone, this is just a peom I felt like writing the other day, needs edits! suggestions please? Dead Magic. Her nimble fingers weave magic The delicate creators of a ...

This is definately a poem filled with a lot of deep emotion. Of course there are things we can improve and many bits that are already very fantastic. There are ...

Slow and steady The rain falls Eyes of pane glass ( Do you mean for these last two lines to rhyme and not the first ones? Interesting idea) Drops glide ...

I’ve been chasing stars ‘round this universe Playing hopscotch down the Milky Way Calling on the constellations for a place to call my own My home is there where bliss ...

hey thanks everyone for the comments, helps me a lot :) this is the first time i have ever tried writing poetry in short lines so i wasn't too sure ...

whoa. I think you have talent and a lot of potential as a writer. The dialogue was really good and i was able to visualize everything in my head! Great ...

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thankyou :) haha i have a dog and a cat, i'm thinking of volunteering at a shelter sometime in the spring maybe lol ah yes they are but they can ...