Emerson

Eimear already comments on capitalization so I won't even comment on it at all. This looks more like a playlist than a poem. It would have been cute had it ...

The rhyme scheme makes it too forced, such as the line with hieroglyphs. Writing a poem with rhymes is hard because you have to make it seem natural, and not ...

What are you trying to say here? I understand what you're trying to say - but it has no effect on me. Eimear correctly pointed out: show, don't tell. And ...

Like I said, I'm not sure what this is. I'm not sure what this is, either. Did you mean to post this in the lyrics section? Is it a song? ...

Hullo darling! I love reviewing your poetry. Curious: did you edit at all before posting, since it was old? The sharp end branches shook amber leaves away that year; but ...

While I completely love the message you're giving, it doesn't make a great poem. Have you heard the term "getting up on your soap box"? It means preaching to your ...

Hello there! Newbie is a naught word. You're just an awesome new member. Why are you confused? If you have any questions or need help finding your way around the ...

Hello Zanya! I have to say, that is a beautiful name. If you have any questions about YWS, or need help finding something on the site, feel free to send ...

If you get to throw a dictionary at their head, can I dump the Encyclopaedia Britannica...? I never know what to say. I think a full collection of the Oxford ...

Hello there! This was a real cute idea. I second Eimear -- show more than you tell. Use less adjectives, and instead describe vividly. Keep in mind poetic elements like ...

Huh. I've never done it like that. Interesting though! I'll have to get used to it... Ever since I've coded I've left codes open until I was done with them... ...

Natiepoo! I think the new format-thing you've added to the lit section is rendering my codes useless.... In one of my stories I have a section of text, several paragraphs, ...

Hullo love! Either because I love you, or because you are pestering me [your take!] I'm here to request things. They have many comments, but I would still appreciate all ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS. What genre is your novel? You must have a lot of passion for it if you've been working on it so long. I'd be interested to ...

Hello! I assume you like writing - why else you would be here - so what kinds of things do you write? Poetry, fiction, nonfiction? What genre do you favor? ...