Emerson

Hey there! I edited the line break in your story because it was too long and it was stretching out the front page. That's all! :)

This poem looked like it needed some love. I think you have some really great lines here, or some great ideas. The first stanza has to be my favorite; the ...

From the first stanza this starts to get confusion. Rather than writing a meaningful poem about dreams and what they mean, you are sticking to a rhyme that then falls ...

Your body is the road of potholes and pinpricks: twisted nudity fondling flesh. Your fingers are the truck careening too close to the shoulder, caressing my navel. I balance on ...

The first thing that throws me off is the title. Paradise Lost is the name of the epic poem by Milton. I'd consider finding something more unique, and less attached ...

I'd prefer to pay at $2, but $4 doesn't bother me either. I pay a lot more for a cellphone each month, and I'm almost certain we spend more on ...

Hello! I wanted to let you know I removed some equal signs (which you were using for a line break) from your post because if you use too many, it ...

Known for being super cool, amazing at poetry, having beautiful avatars, going to Africa, and generally being a great person! did I mention Via writes great poetry already?

they want to prove that copyright infringing amterial is more popular than original videos? Why on earth would that require every single youtube user's name and IP adress? Couldn't they ...

I'm not sure if it cuts off by intention or by error... Either way, Welcome to YWS? If you have any questions about the site feel free to PM me. ...

Notes on past tense would be great! I'm not sure how much more of an explanation my course is going to give me. >

I'm taking a German II course through independent study. The problem is, sometimes my course book is lacking the best explanation of things. I'm not completely dumb when it comes ...

Heehee, Prok has a good answer, but it's not so simple. You couldn't take a story in the third person, change all the pronouns/names, and call it day. It's different ...

oooh we have things in common. Hello! And welcome to YWS. I'll be redundant and say that if you have any questions or need help finding your way around the ...

It makes me think of the phrase "tie up the loose ends" which is probably your intention. I think it would be about the story of people picking up after ...