Emerson

We can still go - let me just find my keys. I drive better drunk :lol: Your teacher sounds a little loopy. they said "tee hee" that was..surprising. So, how ...

do you guys have any advice on how to do the switch really well? my only suggestion would be to make sure the readers know what your doing, so they ...

It was a vampire story. A damn good one too. but I think I just worked too hard on it, if I rewrote/edit it now it would turn out much ...

oh! a love triangle! how great! I was quickly reminded that Cady was a straight [comma] stunning, single girl and in my jealousy I had to stop him from getting ...

large, luxury, wealthy house. I think you should take out 'wealthy' since its the same thing as 'luxury' and change luxury to luxurious. And so I filled the time with ...

Well, I know what you're trying to go for, but you don't need to drop f-bombs. That might have an opposite affect, it may make you look bad. Use actions, ...

wow, that was really good! was this the after gyrfalcons edits? I'm not sure what to point out as 'bad' I actually liked it a lot. There was one thing ...

Reading was for me, and people who tried and hid, I found it later. I don't follow this sentence... It's nice, I'm interested to see where you go with it ...

I agree it was rather short... I'm not sure what to say? It wasn't bad, but I think it read like a movie add, or a movie introduction. I think ...

Writing Fiction: The Practical Guide from New York's Acclaimed Creative Writing School by Gotham Writers' Workshop it was the first book I read on writing. It changed what I do ...

His attention snapped to her ans I faded out. I'm surprised I made it home at all.......... The excess ellipsis, Though interesting, is very unneeded. Use a period ;-) It ...

Very nice, really puts everyone in their place! hah. I'd say I'm a critiquer, but then I'd feel I'm bragging... I'm also a Pedant which surprises me because IMO I ...

As none of you know, I sent a story into Writer's Digest 75th Annual Writing Competition. And, though I haven't received the actual results yet, I did receive my Nov/Dec ...

I'm not sure what I'm best at, so this is definitely a guess. I say style. People on another forum rave about my prose, but I'm not even sure what ...

I liked that a low, and though I'm bad at critiquing poetry, I thought it was very beautiful! It reminds me of my 8th grade year. I've always said to ...