Emerson

her eyes adjusted from dim light of the candlelit room you should condense when you can. say "her eyes adjusted from the dim candlelit room" The story is real wordy, ...

Lolita — Vladmir Nobokov (I might have misspelled the name) That is by far my number one book right now. Nobokov is Russian and English isn't his native language, but ...

They talked too loud, never did their homework, and just plain disregarded all that was decent. take out 'plain'. It's better to strip your writing of unnecisary words to make ...

Chapter 1: So the stories about laser tag? It starts real slow, and the narrators voice is...boring. You use too many words when writing, try to cut stuff down so ...

Well, I've only read the prologue but I'm swooning with excitement! You brought the two main characters in a lovely way, I think the only sentence I'd be picky with ...

That was a nice read, Snoink :-) I've got two years until college but I still debate with myself over what I want to major in. I think it goes ...

I'm such a book nut case, and all I will read are old classics, not much else unless its something for shear entertainment so I really liked this idea... There ...

Well, this was....rough... Dieu, this is going to be fantastico. Don't use french, darling, unless your character is french :-D and I doubt they are. Je ne sais pas... Well, ...

I believe she had been eight-and-twenty at that time. I just had to compliment you on that, perfect! Beautiful. Though I hadn’t witnessed the hanging of Mr and Mrs Manning ...

such scars on his person that would I didn't like this much, because no one would say that. They wouldn't say 'on his person' and from what I can infer ...

That's kind of silly... I mean you look, they aren't affiliated with NaNoWriMo. At first thought, it's almost like "So you didn't win Nanowrimo? WELL! here's your chance to make ...

I'm not sure what comes easiest. I haven't done much that has given good results (nothing satisfies me) But back to Nano... I've said it thousands of times now, but, ...

I like that one. I think I liked last weeks better, though. The one about making everything simpler so that they can read it and enjoy it. yeah, that one... ...

. Like, if you're so stressed out you can barely move, or maybe you're very ill. Snoink O.o I don't think that's writers block, I think that's more like...You-need-a-hospital issues. ...

He brushed his teeth, as he did every morning [comma] and walked down the stairs. It was two months till Charles was discharged from the hospital. should be until, not ...