Emerson

That was real cute. The ending was real obvious though, which was disappointing. I think if we would have not know she had died, I would have liked it better. ...

It's my first year, also. I've planned, not thoroughly enough. I should probably do more planning, come to think of it. I got to a certain point and stopped because ...

so there is a limit then? No resources! Gotcha! :-) Mines a vampire story with a kick *I hope* [s]I'm still working out all the kinks in the plot and ...

I'm back for more! Hee Hee. Chapter 3: I woke later in the sand felling a little peculiarly stranger than usual. remove 'peculiarly' The first thing I noticed besides the ...

I just caught the new logo, so cute! It's so sweet of you to redo this place for the holidays.... Nice job :-D

true... they are loose. Maybe I look at them too strongly? But some people hold to genres like they're gold, and that's what they're novel will be launched off of, ...

-in that old book that I never seem to read, but pull out now and then to be reminded exactly how old it is and marvel at the yellow pages ...

What is your take on genres? I was sitting, reading, while my dad mentioned that "new dragon movie" (Eragon, is it?) and I started thinking about how genre's are so ...

I think they could pull of constant conflict, maybe? And constant depression. It just has to be reasonable, and realistic. No ones going to believe that the day your main ...

I don't think it makes the stories the forums property. Although I do know if you plan to publish it/submit it to a contest you will want to either a) ...

nice story you have starting, though its sort of rough at the beginning. Try to do some showing. like instead of saying that the one character ( I forget who) ...

I didn't read anything above, so sorry if I'm repeating! It was very...immature? Not to be cruel, no no. You tried, and that's whats important, yes? Several sentences made no ...

ah long windedness, foo! Toss out your inhibitions! (I wish I could...) Welcome to the forum, if you need any help I'll be of assistance, though I suggest you don't ...

I'd take out all the perinthesis, just make it real grammar with commas and what not, maybe make the sentences shorter in that case? Break up the first paragraph, that's ...

The bullet had punctured her. Life had no where to go but out. when I read this, I could think of a literal 'life' sort of gas rising out of ...