Emerson

Welcome! Hope you have fun? (I'm too tired to say anything else... ^^')

I edited to fit most of the above spoken needs :-) Or not...

Oh not all that often. I'm always up and moving. - Lev too often! I have to shake them and stand and walk and lean to the right and its ...

I learned that: I did not write a novel over November, oh no. I wrote a plot hole! The whole thing is a plot hole...

woo hoo! I'm excited. I have an article in squills AND I feel confident about my six word story entry. It's okay that you weren't around, Nate, I was gone ...

It's pretty. But I don't think it has anything beyond that. And yes, Poetry... someone should move it. I have to say, it's bland. What are you giving us? Your ...

I will say that I didn't finish reading, and that I think this deserved an R rating. I could try hard to critique this, and pick it apart as I ...

Don't forget to end sentence in periods :-) you seem to have a lack of those. The lines don't have much rhythm and feel choppy. I'm not sure what I ...

I'm a scoundrel, I think. But a poetic one. - Lev I try so very hard to never be at a "worst" anything. I'd much rather be happy. *whisperes so ...

wow. You can draw. Thats so cool! Because, you know, I can't draw at all. My stick figures look bad.

I haven't much to say about the words (yet) but you seem to have forgotten that punctuation exists. Don't forget that key element. Otherwise it's difficult for me to read ...

Ah, I see everyone has already beat this, and I shan't beat the dead further. But: the lack of punctuation up until the end is disruptive. Punctuation creates a guide ...

How would you suggest to "tidy up the rhythm"? I'm new to poetry, and poetry editing... I'm glad you are...indifferent on it? At least it isn't horrible.

((It's cliché ! Don't hate me!)) Sade's Folly Sade, daring cupid of this tale, Lay under a tree and its veil Of rouge flower and gold leaf. Who came to ...

Eh.. I'm not sure what to say? I'll try to be kind. First, the title? I'm not sure how it relates to the poem. There isn't any punctuation so if ...