Emerson

Thank you guys so much for the reviews, but this is over a year old! If you'd like to review my poetry and help me out, try to find something ...

Hello! The first thing I noticed when reading was that this has no punctuation! Some poems can get away without, but more often than not punctuating your poem is a ...

I don't know any of those bands but Sufjan Stevens is wonderful. :) You should check out his album Seven Swans. I don't exactly listen to Christian music, but he ...

Hahah, Nate. ^^ Actually, it's a scientific fact that people better remember the beginning or the end of long lists. Therefore, win! Yay, YWS. :)

If only we got paid. *sigh* :]

I shall be gentle, I promise! Or, at the least, one can hope helpful. ;-) Repetition: You repeat 3 lines 4 times, which means the you actually only have 19 ...

You should probably practice writing it every so often too Wink I most wholly concur! But if you've never read it you probably have no idea how to write it, ...

Hi there! I'm going to pick at some small things first because this is worth it. Perhaps it was the cracks in her lips that oozed pretty crimson, or [s]that[/s] ...

Hello Pen! My ugliness is honesty; Your prettiness a lie. Is there anyway you can get away from the -ness words? They sound gross. I love the meaning behind this ...

I concur regarding the last line. :) This is sort of Pygmalion, except without coming to life! What I love about this poem is how the statue is living, though ...

is to read poetry. I thought you should know. :elephant:

Hello there! Since this is your second poem, I have to ask, have you read poetry? I'm not assuming that you don't, don't take me wrong. :) Simply, I know ...

Hullo there! I've probably said this about some of your other poems, I'm not certain? I really only have one thing to point out: Show, don't tell! Since I believe ...

Well, in some cultures a lot of violent things happen which outsiders don't generally consider civil, but that's still culture. So I suppose it depends on what kind of culture ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I know you joined in October, but since you have only one post I'm assuming you're still new. If you have any questions about the ...