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Showers. - Lev Have you ever had a mental Break down?

First off, I don't think I've critiqued anything by you, or ever generally said welcome to you. Welcome to YWS! I'm Claudette! Instructor-soon-to-be-Jr. Mod! :-D Now then, the critique. Punctuation. ...

From someone else's perspective, they may say my worst (most annoying) quality, is the quality that I never show. I'm not sure what these people are talking about; these are ...

Unneeded Information AUTHOR’S BLURB I’ve been wanting to write an article on the quote, “Don’t show us a gun, if someone isn’t going to get shot,” for the longest time, ...

Poetry & Punctuation By: Claudette EXAMPLE Then turning to my love I said 'The dead are dancing with the dead The dust is whirling with the dust' But she - ...

“I’m not really sure what I saw.” Kyle clicked, and the figures on the screen started jumping and twirling again. Ack. This is like a really bad situation here. Thats ...

I would love it, if I had a crackberry like cool Brad. I just have a cell phone. Either way, I'd love it! I'd totally run up my bill for ...

It's a cute idea, but there are some things that could be fixed up. Boys as disgusting as a dead bird Boys are plural, so "bird" should be plural. They ...

I'd pick it up, just to see what the heck it was about. I immediately think Faust, vampires, or bad people. But thats me XD I certainly like the title, ...

Abstract poetry, like you always seem to do :? , goes up and over me. But the punctuation looks good! *smirks* it was nice, but I understood nothing. And its ...

I don't really have any comments on the subject, just on the format and some lines. The Lego bricks tumble and fall, The men [comma, or colon. Your choice.] they ...

; it’s a loop diuretic I'm just checking. Is that a typo? Jonathon looked up and hated himself in this moment like he had for the past ten years. I ...

You could just create all out Havoc. That is ALWAYS fun. One of the characters does something HORRIBLY wrong, I fight happens, there are tears and nasty words said, and ...

I probably wouldn't pick it up. It makes me think of something Mooshy and grosh. I wouldn't read it. I just...don't like the word 'brains' it sounds funny. I'd think ...

Lol, sounds like you already Shot it. Thats the problem with writing, good anyway. Your characters do what they want. Is it you that is making the romance to noticeable, ...