Emerson

“Jonathon,” Kyle shook his hand. “Hey, what happened last night?” “Oh, sorry.” Jonathon shook his head and looked down at their touching hands. He pulled his slightly away. These bolded ...

It was good. I haven't a single complaint! Well, no. At one point, the dialog/action got weird and I couldn't see it happening (The fight) but eventually it picked back ...

Interesting. Makes me think the slightest bit of LOST because of the others. Makes me ask, if this is the 'other' city, what about the general city? I would love ...

Saints is religious, so I think religion. Fire. Could be anything, Vampires, or the burning of witches, or piros even! But the fact that it is THE fire saints, I ...

Strange. I think of the camera. I would probably be interrested by the cover art more than anything :-D -- To keep no secrets

I did minor edits mentioned by bubble and Sam finally! Sam: I loved your advice, but I think I'm going to take it up and embrace it when I get ...

Oh, truly, in some small senses. I am an artist, a painter, and expect nothing less than perfection from myself! - Lev No. I think that I am not. - ...

You used punctuation! I thank you for that nice act. The poem did not always make sense, some parts were very blurred and easy to misunderstand. You also float on ...

Oh. You seem to have 'hit the nail on the head' as Americans say. Yes, I run from the law. But, wouldn't you like to know why? You never asked ...

It's...weird. And I don't get it. I probably wouldn't pick it up. heh. -- To Find, But Not To Seek

Never. I have too much responsibility. What have I to be scare of, anyway? I control my life. I control everything: With control, there is no fear. - Lev I ...

You're mixing first, second, and third person points-of-view, and that technique generally doesn't work well. I'd have to say, I don't care :-D Thank you for all the comments though! ...

and in recent times, Kyle new, for Kyle’s department of mathematics. missing the letter k in 'knew' fourteen hundred dollar chairs are there 14 $100 chairs, or $1,400 chairs? That ...

She saw in him the uncontrollable desire to self-destruct so prominent in every man she had ever loved, and it made her sad to see Jonathon this way. I ...don't ...

“Again? I wouldn’t want to do it all wrong and have to put them back on again, professor” missed the comma on the end. I loved the bit with the ...