Emerson

Just like phorcys said, very powerful. I liked how you used short lines in some places, it made it dramatic.

(yeah, meant Mea. But I type too quickly) I like it. Mostly because it reminds me of a Thoushaltnot song, "let your silence sing" it also had a magic quality ...

Only when I there any proper way to say it? Enticed. - Lev Oh, often. Even just someones eyes looking at me too closely, and I turn all red. - ...

Pirates are cool :-D Welcome to the forum! Hope to see you around!

Welcome! I'm sure everyone else has given the whole 'if you need something PM me' speech, so I won't do the same :-D Hope to see you, and your work, ...

It doesn't 'rule' me, nothing rules me. If I decide to be gentle, then it is so. If I decide to be a hating bastard, then it is so. I ...

I would pick it up! It sounds like it could be anything, it leaves it to the mind of the reader. Romance. Action. Revenge. Wars. Really, it could be anything. ...

I would play an extra, because I've never been of acting. - Lev I'd want to be the leading lady! Acting and Modeling are almost the same thing, right? - ...

WOW. This was just perfect. No errors. I loved the end. "Like I always do." hee hee hee. Why was Jon so hesitant to speak about Danielle? Are they having ...

I agree with Chandni, there really isn't any flow to this or pattern. As for the subject of the poem, it isn't new. Try to make the reader connect with ...

Catalina peeled her eyes away from his worried ones don't make your character's eyes do funky things. This piece is very short... its well written in some places, then in ...

his strides were as a silent as his presence. take out the extra 'a' The dark haired one sat on the edge of the bed with her legs drawn up ...

Yay first writing tip! I could see these getting messed up. Thats helpful :-D

you don't really need to go "meeeeeeeeeeee" We want to read the lyrics and see if they are pretty, not see how you might sing them. Also some of your ...

It's abstract. You know, tilt your head to the left and squint?