Emerson

Solitude. But I am an antisocial. I never liked others. They were always stupider than me. - Lev I am not sure... I would love to be in company, with ...

I didn't put a lot of effort into reading it. Poetry is not just verses that sentences are in. Poems have to have structure. Rhythm, common stanza pattern, anything . ...

All can move through a choice. I didn't like this line. It doesn't make much sense, on its own. (which is how it is in the poem) Again, you seem ...

woah! No arguing in my thread or I will have a Mod hunt you down and kill you! :-P Anyway, Cameron, thanks for the add ins, I'll take a look.

First, Welcome to the Site! I think you are new, yeah? This poem sort of has a good subject matter, it really doesn't get "sort of" good until the end. ...

Thank Adam, Leon, and MC :-) I changed the line, I think it works better now. But what do the almighty critiquers think?

Thanks for all the comments, and I made the changes mentioned! But I'd certainly like more opinions. :-D

I would be a Dos Prompt, because I control all. (Actually, computers don't exist in there time frame...) - Lev I would be a picture, because I like modeling. (thats ...

Lev- It would depend on who the person was. Can I randomly choose other characters from my story to be on the building? Fleur: He would pull her back, tell ...

Typo: He said I should put down te pills,

It has some flow, then sometimes it doesn't. I'm never fond of these dark depressing poems because they tend to be all the same, though here you talk with God ...

You certainly have skill. I like the last two the best, and possibly the second one the most. It's so dark . You gotta love something thats dark like that ...

Well Alright.... :-D I'm sure you could just get a Admin to change your name....?

*feels the need to quote Wilde* "I can resist anything but temptation" - Claudette herself. Women. Some have said (through critiquing of that story I'm in) that I'm a sex ...

Hi There! I'm Claudette! And, I've actually dabbled in screen writing. It's a bit odd for the normal writer to try, so I haven't picked it back up since, but ...