Emerson

The funny thing is that they were put up in I believe three other cities, as well as Boston, and only Boston freaked out and noticed them as bombs. What ...

You lean to heavily on the rhyming. It makes it ugly, because it constantly rhymes; this kind of rhyming isn't suggested.. The subject matter was also rather...dry, though original. But ...

Well if you insist on using quotes, then I insist that it should be properly punctuated then :-) I'll take a chunk out and show you. “I am. I exist. ...

I hated the ellipses, find some other way to punctuate it you don't need so many pauses. This whole piece is set in quotes, meaning its a speech, its being ...

They offer Japanese? You must be going to a good school, mine only offers French, German, and Spanish :-p Anyhow, Welcome! If you have any questions, need help around, want ...

I gave a poem to my (now ex) boyfriend for Christmas. It was kind of a crappy poem, by poetic standards, but because he didn't know that, it was lovely ...

*grins* I like Aqua Teen Hunger Force. (That was the show they were advertising)

I would love to be published. The place where I am most hopeful is my short stories. But I haven't worked on my good short stories in quite some time. ...

"Your hands the most" what? Your hand the most beautiful? The most ugly? And grammatically "Your hands are the most." I don't really have anything to pick at, other than ...

I liked it, and can't really make any complaints other than I didn't like the last line. You already said it at the beginning; try to end us on a ...

*throws confetti* I hope it doesn't get too big. Sometimes it's hard to stay a part of REALLY busy forums. But I still wish YWS the best because I love ...

Welcome aboard Capn' If you have any questions, need help finding your way around the site, or want a critique, go right ahead and PM me or anyone else that ...

Finally, I get around to this. You don't know how sorry I am for being so slow :-) Follow the trail of the moon’s blood[i/].,the message had said That period ...

I'm probably start writing mystery after I got the hang of writing just a fiction novel. It's always a good idea to start SOMEWHERE, right? Even if you start both ...

I need to work on this problem. I don't appeal to all of the sense; I think out of the most I abuse smell because (as you mentioned) I'm not ...