Emerson

He pulled up the boy’s chart. His name was Damon. OMFG, its Damon again! just to make sure it was a figment of his imagination. should it be "wasn't"? “I—“ ...

I'd have to add one of my favorite books to this "tragic love story" list. Camille: The Lady of the Camellias by Alexandre Dumas fils is probably one of the ...

Bienvenue! What do you like to write? Or rather, what genre? If you have any questions, need some help, or would like a critique, go ahead and Pm me :-D ...

Bienvenue :-) If you have any questions, need help around the site, or want a critique feel free to give me a shout! Though, the best way to get critiques, ...

You should space out your paragraphs (Which I would have done for you but it is a little confusing where the spaces would go, the way it is written...) and ...

If it had punctuation, I would come back and read it. Right now, its somewhat too hard to understand without the punctuation in certain areas. tears fears and insecurities reached ...

It started out with a nice flow then sort of tapered off and got bulky and wordy. extremely happy, or unbearably sad. You're a writer, yeah? You can find better ...

Well thats a bummer. Oh well. It's not like I'm ever far from the house anyway :-D

I tried it, for kicks (I'm not exactly sure if I have free internet on my phone, probably not) and got a "file too large" error. I have a Samsung ...

Grammar wise, etc. my only big complaint is you could have used more punctuation. I'm not exactly sure what to say. We get a lot of poems here about teenage ...

We had a snow day. I got to thus avoid the complications involved in being at school on valentines day and being single. It worked out nicely. I think I ...

Trying your hand at poetry again, I see? Some verses I had to reread to pick up on what was being said (Which is not your fault, but mine!) and ...

I couldn't catch the whole meaning of the poem, which tends to happen when I'm reading something by you...but I could catch, or at least I hope I did, the ...

I spaced this out for you, so it's nice and easier to read. In the future, you should space it out like I did. It is easier on the eyes.

I spaced your work out so its easier to read. You should put full breaks in between your paragraphs, as seen above.