Emerson

Your rhythm/meter is off. There is no strict pattern to it, and sometimes the couplets aren't even the same length. And I'm just going to Echo 'Manda. This was vague, ...

I liked it though it comes off vague, I feel like you could have put just a little bit more into it. You're just telling us stuff, and slightly making ...

Meh... I'm going to be bluntly honest, okay? Don't get too hurt, I hope. The blog entry was horribly annoying. If the rest of the story is narrative, what is ...

I put spaces between your paragraphs, or at least where I could see paragraphs (so If I messed up, sorry!). This make it easier to read, try to do this ...

It's such a shame though as sad endings are just depressing. not all of them. I remember how much I loved the ending to Crime and Punishment . Sure, he ...

Thanks! Finally, a comment on it :-D Yeah, my conclusion was crumby. I was trying to get 5 pages, and I did, so I was happy. Not sure what I ...

I thought it would be helpful to have a list of links that have to do with Romance writing, so I compiled some articles from around the site and from ...

Well technically Mrs is an abbreviation, right? So it should end in a period. But I do see what your saying, though I've always noticed it with a period even ...

“Jonathon,” Dr. Colbert said, lightly tapping on the door and stepping inside. makes me think of Steven Colbert. Ha ha. “I could feel it. It was watching us—it spoke to ...

I love to write dark stories That's great to hear, me too! Although, not everything is really 'dark' but you can always find a cynical side to something I am ...

Have a Cigar by Pink Floyd. Handy google, eh? Floyd is so good, but I've never heard this song, to my knowledge.

BienVenue! If you have any questions, need help around the site, or want a critique, feel free to come bother me and I'll do my best :-D Hope you have ...

bienvenue! If you need any help around the site, have questions, or want a critique, feel free to shoot me a message :-D What genre do you write in? I've ...

He could hear them whispering amongst one another as if confused with what to do to him. Either a comma after "another" or put "they" in between 'if' and 'confused. ...

and the city was rapidly heading towards a quarantine if things did not resolve themselves quickly. something about this bothers me. It doesn't sound right. Not sure why. She let ...