Emerson

I figured we have a "Rate The....Above You" game for nearly everything, why not these too? So yes, like all the others rate on a one to ten scale, comment ...

More often than not I would say, yes. - Lev I'm not entirely sure how to answer that. - Fleur Are you bored?

My only critique is that it has almost a complete absence of punctuation, making it a sort of run-on-sentence-poem. Poetry & Punctuation by me, might help you out a bit ...

I certainly love writing. I wouldn't throw my work at PA, though I nearly did but thank goodness I had the smarts to research it a bit before stupid me ...

Nothing. - Lev Lipgloss, now and then. - Fleur Why do people ask stupid questions?

I like the way it sounds. It really reminds me of the noir film era, just thinking of all the industrial sort of things being built. I see construction works ...

Where is this big bang to answer questions you were talking about? The table had an insignia in the center: the simple schematic of a lung used in medical classes ...

I didn't read it. Sorry. But just looking at it: there is no reason to use ellipses (...) so much.

I just have one thing: Sarah guesses she is above the ocean, but without anything to make sense of this, why should she guess they are above the ocean? And ...

oen week one I love flashbacks. And I love you. And this feels like LOST, lol. But still, yay!

and only a three folders typo? I feel like I'm reading LOST, only it gives me a headache... I'm starting to realize just how much I have to think about.

She began to more seriously struggle for air beneath him, writhing under his hands 'more seriously' sounds so odd to read... She turned to him and cocked her head, laughed ...

The poem seems to contradict it self. Before your poison arrows struck me down, Spiraling into my love for you. Now I'm drowning in your endless sea of pain. Lost ...

Finally edited Chapter Four. I also finally wrote chapter five, too :-D I'm hoping readers like it. The ending was chanted in the last edit of it, from one paragraph, ...

Ah, I see your point... See, thats why I asked! I didn't know. :-D