Emerson

Some lines need to be looked at, commas and general punctuation should be taken into consideration. It kind of all flows together in spots. One that Mad didn't point out: ...

I have high regards of myself, but being heterosexual, and at that, rather attracted to women, I'll go with females. But even there, I am picky. I won't go into ...

Despite its almost list-like qualities, something about it brought me into it. I suppose because the way you write it, I could have been the main character. I only have ...

Rieda> Thanks for always being so generous in your comments :-) Mad> "I sink, nor swim..." I'm not sure sure that I am missing a word? Although "I don't sink, ...

Black Water I tangle myself in the net of life while trying not to drown in its waters. I tread waves weakly, tied down by anchors made of memories: forgotten, ...

PLEASE learn to post in the right section :-) (Thanks for moving it snoink) But to the argument: Can you write good rhyming poetry? Can you write good free verse? ...

Actually, I think the colon defines it so much better than a semicolon could. The whole poem is about the note book, the colon kind of says "This is the ...

It took three hours to trek over the graveyard, to read the inscriptions and keep moving, another two to drive back to town. Something in this sentence sounds so wrong. ...

It really is beautiful. You have a lovely knack for word choice. But it's all too obvious lack of punctuation makes me want to strangle it—you don't even have commas ...

I liked it. I love the relation of caterpillars and cocoons to a notebook, perhaps butterflies should be added as well, for beauty? I think in the first line it ...

Eloquent? The things I paint are eloquent, the women I make love to (on my better days, when I'm not so drunk that I can't seem them well; and of ...

Sounds almost like a vampire hunter series, but not you know? A series of books (like 15!) about an exorcist who does it for "Fun and profit". I could see ...

Granted, you have Physics class for the rest of your life. I wish I didn't have dial up.

Makes me think of Touched by an Angel, which I never watched, which then makes me think of something from family guy *giggles* Either a romance, or a religious story. ...

Like every man, I refuse assistance. It seems to be in our genes, we wish to do everything without someone else's aide. - Lev I called Fel to come with ...