Emerson

10/10 It's continuously random star wars things... :-D

In reply to the new edits you made with indents, since you told me you intended to do that, but didn't know how... It reads much better. Ignore number two ...

I'm not sure why it wasn't showing, dreamy couldn't see it either. Now it's a link. Hope it fixed.

Complete strangers. The man is ignorant of the woman, and the woman seems oddly infatuated with the man. The man reminds her of someone she once knew, a lost love? ...

[Are we supposed to be writing ministories? I think not...] They seem like two children, a brother and a sister. I'll go dark, and say Hansel and Gretel abandoned by ...

Reading by suggestion :-) The story, the basic story, is a well thought out one. It's intriguing, true to life, and could cause a lot of psychological things to come ...

I enjoyed it, but sometimes the lines felt as if they were all to long. The rhyming went well, and the story was true to life. I think if you ...

I read and critiqued one; wasn't that bad. merely sentences of vulgarity. Anyway, What I was planning on saying: Don't forget to review two things before submitting your own work ...

As for Mr. Brown, he came away from the entire incident with nothing more than a hole the size of a basketball in the back of his head and a ...

Oh, and I hope my writing doesn't disturb anyone too much. *giggles innocently* If I haven't sent one person into trauma yet, I doubt you will either. What do you ...

Doesn't exactly work the way one should hope. "I , My, Me" to avoid the 'me, myself, and I' cliche, but "my" is a possessive noun (or something?) so it ...

Sounds like a YA book, either about a gang of people on the run, or literally a music band on the run. I might pick it up....but I don't usually ...

You rot in the ground. Isn't that lovely? Unless of course you were cremated, eaten, cut into little pieces, or other violent things. There is no after life, if that ...

Over all, improvement! *throws confetti* But in some spots, I don't like it... For her the indifferent earth would rage, Its mountain ranges torn asunder, [should be a period] For ...

*cough* This doesn't seem like much of a serious post, so I won't take too long to critique it. 1. Don't show us your rubbish, why should we waste time ...