Emerson

Noticing my name upon the screen (and to return the critique you have given me) I have come to give this a look ^_^ Upon first notice: you have an ...

Hee. I think I'll leave it as is, simply because it is creating room for interpretation, and I always like confusing people. But thank you for the comments. The last ...

Thanks Tangerine! I have a question though. The second stanza feels sort of uneven, jerky, disjointed. Not so sure why, but I think it has to do with the way ...

It was certainly neat, and some aspects of it were really unique, like the way it started out like the prayer, "As I lay me down to sleep..." (Isn't that ...

Bonjour et Bienvenue Mlle Ampy :-D Welcome to YWS! I hope you have an awesome time here, it is such a lovely site! If you have any questions, need some ...

I'm making publication considerations, upon DD's comments. I think it would be cool to get Black Water published, although I'm rather stupid when it comes to anything about publication... But ...

I listen to music so much, but rarely does it actually reflect its self in my music, which may be because I don't always have music playing while writing. At ...

I....don't think this is a poem. And 'thysely' isn't a word. You repeated "thou shalt not", ended each sentence with, '...' and it made no sense, and, yeah, like I ...

*dies in amazement* You know, I'm shocked xD Thank you dreamy! Am I really that good? You all know I don't truly believe that. No, no, no, no, me, good? ...

Colly- Perhaps you don't need to lengthen, but simply improve with what you have already given us? Word choice is an amazing thing! ;-) As for leaning to much onto ...

ooh. I like it! It's very pretty. I liked the last two stanzas the most, "verbose" being such a pretty word, and the last really capturing it over all. It ...

Sounds like a short story title, because it is in itself sort of a story. It is part of a dialog. Doesn't tell much about the actual story though... If ...

I've always loved the a,b,b,a rhyme scheme... Providentially, he was potentially, [11] [s]Enamoured[/s] enamored by the [s]glamour[/s] glamor [7] Of his near flawless stammer, [7] Till the words he sp

Isn't this the one you wanted me to critique? Oh well.. .:-D In the stilled sands of holy time she preyed . Preyed/prayed. I assume you do mean prey, and ...

I like it. The sonnet set up is beautiful. But, at some parts, I'm a little lost for what you mean. When I say some parts, I actually mean, just ...