Emerson

C1 p2 (Finally getting back to this...) She shivered at the freezing dew stinging her face and unconsciously pulled a cloth that didn’t smell familiar around her. You said a ...

Like your other poem, you repeated the title, and the first line, in each of the stanza's beginnings. You'll have to kill yourself of that habit because it does nothing ...

The repetition of "friendship" in this poem really killed it for me, and your punctuation was haywire. On another one of your poems I posted a link on that (punctuation) ...

The one thing I got from this the most was the rhyming and you overused it to the strongest degree. Rhyming is good to have in poetry, but if it ...

Oh gosh I'm seeing polarity between that idea, and The Good Earth . Taking America in general, we have a lot of poor/homeless/unemployed people. Of course, I'm kind of assuming. ...

Hmm.... The writing was good. But perhaps I am not a person for these kinds of things. I was bored. Oh gosh, bored out of my mind. Why do I ...

I liked this. It seemed like an odd take on two people meeting up, yes? heir mission on becoming one, developed a true prestige, willow voices narrated our vast law ...

You said I can be blunt so... I will: I didn't like it. But! I can entirely back up that claim, and hopefully you can fix that problem and make ...

some things=one word, somethings. Some parts of this poem I liked, for example: The world is a painting over a painting over something ancient and pulsing, trapped under the artists' ...

I think the major problem with this poem is that it is expressing a feeling: but it doesn't express it well enough. The idea of having a war for no ...

I can't exactly say it was good. It was a rambly poem about mushrooms. I can't even write it a good critique... at least it rhymed well enough? It was ...

Bonjour et bienvenue! Welcome to YWS. If you have any questions or need some help getting around, feel free to PM me and I'll answer anything =D I hope you ...

gar. I hate Ariel. And this is beyond the hate I had for Sarah xD This is serious wtf is wrong with you? hate. With a capital H! Poor Jon...he ...

DAMN RIGHT! he died, I'm excited. And, wtf, was he having sex with Kyle? ewwwwwy. Haaser is just so...odd. And I'm so dang happy he died. I'm sad I'm catching ...

I honestly have to say I hated this chapter xD Simply because Haaser was saying a whole lot of stuff you said in that thing you sent me, and so ...