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Re: Death in the Shape of a Handgun
It would help readers if you spaced this out more. Notice how my paragraphs have a space between each one? Do that in your writing, too. You should read over ...
May 30, 2007 -
Re: POD 4- The big "if" is actually "why"
And hell hath no fury like missed misery. "Hell hath no fury like *insert something here*" is cliché, and it's the old english again. That's right, I said it. Only ...
May 30, 2007 -
Re: POD 3- Coming Home
It'd been two weeks since Jamie had written anything. Mostly because she had nothing to write about. Though she had a million things to write about. this is another spot ...
May 30, 2007 -
Re: What you Want?
Ah... Moving this to lyrics, it seems.
May 30, 2007 -
Re: POD 2- Poison Gas
the trouble [s]off[/s] of all that suffering Despite this fact, Jamie's story didn't change. In meaning or in narration. Should be one sentence. I don't see the point in the ...
May 30, 2007 -
Re: Necropolis
She was even more shaken. Damn, it was loaded , she thought. She slowly passed the money over to him. "W-well now that you're the one with the gun...Are you ...
May 30, 2007 -
Re: POD 1- On Both Accounts
locked in her dark room writing I think this should be "Locked in her dark room, writing" or "locked in her dark room and writing" because otherwise "dark room writing" ...
May 30, 2007 -
Re: For the Incessant Inner Editor
This seems like it would be really good for going over Nanowrimo Novels and the like...Then you just use that to rewrite. Do you know if you can print with ...
May 30, 2007 -
Re: Prosthesis: The Condensed Version
Because it was about time I wrote a fanfic script.. --- Scene: A park. It’s raining. KYLE: We’re getting married. JON: Wait, what? With who? KYLE: I’m marrying Ariel, Jon. ...
May 30, 2007 -
Re: COSMONAUTiCAL
er... I'm moving this to random. Even if it does have to do with art, this isn't for advertising.
May 30, 2007 -
Re: Elfy
I love her hair...and the thing wrapped all around her. That's awesome, and she looks so pretty ^.^ Great job Jenna!
May 30, 2007 -
Re: Beauty in Death [Don't worry, it's too late]
Is this about anorexia? I can be slow. It was pretty, but I didn't feel anything...Though I did love the ending. But I didn't really go "awww she's dying" either, ...
May 30, 2007 -
Re: Ode to Ocean Waves--Published!
Yay poems! Nothing to say other than technical stuff, I can't speak much about dragons.. O frothing ocean waves that mold the land O, comma, frothing? And, you had NO ...
May 30, 2007 -
Re: Portraits--Reese, John, Guitars, Random Guy
Awesome! The guys face looks weird (the one you have twice) but either way you still draw better than me! Those aren't that bad at all =]
May 30, 2007 -
Re: National Towel Day
I missed this *cries*
May 30, 2007