Emerson

Richards rage Richard [apostrophe] rage. Richard owns his rage! (lol, I had to say that, it sounds funny..) It's my job to spread the knowledge of what most are afraid ...

Her mom walked across the room and placed on hand on Jamie's shoulder, and peeked over it to read. Eh...what? “Well, it can be Tammy leaving, Jamie almost smiled at ...

That is the bestest story I ever read EBM! You rock my Chuck Norris themed socks!

quiet voices reached me and and mom through the swinging door here. Isn't this meant to be 3rd person? Yeah that could have been so much worse.. And really, I ...

“Don't argue with me Tammy,” Comma before Tammy, because it's a ...okay well I forget what they are called xD Direct address? I think that is it. putting him under ...

What would come if I did though, how would Richard re-act. Would it be the last act of my teenage betrayal to my father. The father that doesn't love me. ...

Jamie walked across the damp sand, it was raining and nobody was here. Separate sentences. He threw himself down the stairs, then saw her. Wait, he literally threw himself down ...

He didn't say anything for a while, Richard stood at her door, his anger growing force, second by silent second. I think you should say this, "He didn't say anything ...

I missed this.. .xD I'm getting lost in all your chapters. “What does she have but a permanent reservation at Heartbreak Hotel and and endless supply of eager male fans.” ...

however are best seen with your inner child however you said 'however' twice. Same as before, some typos and errors here and there, easy to fix. I'm not too fond ...

I loved this, very much. I really have no critiques on it, just compliments. You captured teenage party nicely, and how general discussion and joking turns to a serious conversation ...

You have some typos here and there, if you read over it you could catch them. I find some parts of this a bit inconsistent/cliche. Taking a blade from a ...

Erm. I have this book. (I stole it from my English teacher xD) She said it's suppose to be one of the best books ever. I started it and then ...

Near the end this totally crashed and turned into an antipoem xD It wasn't even in verse.... Like I said on your other poem, capitalize the pronoun I. This is ...

This is sweet, really is, but doesn't make much of a poem. First off, use real words and not thinks like 'ur' or 'U'. Capitalize the pronoun I, and spell ...