Emerson

I had some papers from World Lit. on courtly love, but seeing as the school year ended, I might have pitched them. I'll have to look around. Otherwise, I'm very ...

Woo. I love your avatar! Hopefully I will soon (within a week or so) be able to have a first red star party.... (I must have lots of time to ...

Thanks for all the comments and complaints! It took me forever but I finally edited, both minor and major. The only thing (that I know of) that got ignored in ...

So you made these yourself? Pretty cool.

Sarah noticed his eyes getting glassy and rolled her eyes. I think it should be "rolled hers" although would it be apostrophe s? Because otherwise your repeat "eyes" I love ...

Since Kitty commented on your lack of punctuation, I'll get to that first. You need to punctuate. Poetry & Punctuation . This poem felt like it was going way too ...

erm, well in any case don't argue. Thanks everyone! I haven't gotten a change to look at any of the links, but I'm sure they'll help me out a lot.

This is a really neat idea, but you did a whole lot of telling about the past. Why not show us some of those scenes? You also did a mini ...

This was interesting, but I think the details could have been done better. You over explained the darkness (we know what dark is) and you could give more attention to ...

Yes.. I think you've jumped off of logical ship? So..She's going to court even though he isn't dead? What are they charging her with, attempted man slaughter? since it is ...

The yellow tape they brought in, creating a barrier between what I had done, and where I was. This starts weird, say "They brought in the yellow tape" "surly" should ...

“I won't allow it.” This sounds too adult, It's say "I won't let you" Mentioning the nice, hard wood floor below gives it away too easily. Don't tell us that. ...

The living room was bright, the same as it [s]has[/s] had always been extending one sweating hand to grasp the handle unwilling to turn it. This sounds weird. her pulse's ...

Nice ^_^ Found some typos here and there. I like the conflict you set up for her to decide. It really pulls back away from, "Is she safe now?" because ...

This was good, and exciting, but the action was confusing at times and you missed words, and had typos. I suggest reading over it to clean up all the confusion. ...