Emerson

Fand ate my thoughts in pointing out the "it is..." pattern, and how annoying it got. I think this poem thrives off of rhyming/rhythm rather than, like one expects from ...

What were you trying to write about? Because, perhaps I didn't understand the poem, but it started and I thought: Oh, this is a poem about writing a poem, in ...

5/10 Anime isn't much my thing...looks...weird.

You... Could just use spell check? There are online spell checkers out there. Or online dictionaries, to help you look up the word. This doesn't really go in literary...but I ...

eh, 6/10? It's just like...a screen cap from an anime.

It was OK. Agreed, sometimes the forced rhyming made the actually lines kind of senseless. Certainly, add some punctuation: Poetry & Punctuation . Also, the poem worked with imagery, but ...

I never came around to greet... so.. Hello =) Like everyone else, if you need help or want a critique, you can PM me. Enjoy the site.

Wow, you do have good map skillz =D That's awesome! (I draw bad stick people...lol)

Look who actually rolled around to something of yours =) he shot the kid grin. the kid a grin Drugged out as they were they reminded him so much of ...

The first one is so cool... The merry go round is...bending. It looks like its running through time (

7/10- tis cute!

I'd like to be--I signed up to join and, as far as I know, have yet to get put in...

Wow. That really is heart breaking...Poor young kyle. Of course, I have so little knowledge of death, that I'm just kind of, "aww..." but I can't really feel with him. ...

First the line-by-lines: His eyes fell upon the sight of the ancient city of Lanoth was aflame. If you cut out the description here, the sentence says, "His eyes fell ...

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